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High school gamers- Sorry I keep posting these.

Discussion in 'Writers' Workshop' started by SteveRomano13, Oct 20, 2014.

  1. SteveRomano13

    SteveRomano13 Member

    Hey Guys,

    If you don't already hate me for posting so many boring Mass high school football games, here's two more.

    If anyone gets a chance, please take a look at either, or both, and just give any feedback.

    Thanks again.

    http://highschoolsports.masslive.com/news/article/1876094313194224270/a-strong-ground-game-keeps-no1-longmeadows-perfect-record-safe/?preview


    http://highschoolsports.masslive.com/news/article/3876103313200224273/mastorakis-three-touchdown-runs-lead-belchertown-to-victory/
     
    SteveRomano13, Oct 20, 2014
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  2. MeanGreenATO

    MeanGreenATO Well-Known Member

    I'm a fan of the persistence. I would definitely try to add a couple more sources in each of these stories, preferably from the head coach. I also like that you included records in the latter story, but they were way too high. It's something that should definitely be in the story, though.
     
    MeanGreenATO, Oct 27, 2014
    #2
  3. SteveRomano13

    SteveRomano13 Member

    Thanks man.
     
    SteveRomano13, Oct 28, 2014
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  4. Central-KY-Kid

    Central-KY-Kid Well-Known Member

    Alex Calabrese’s ground attack came alive early in the game
    "work and practice," Calabrase said. "We"
    "business,” Calabrease explained.

    Calabrese
    Calabrase
    Calabrease
     
    Central-KY-Kid, Oct 30, 2014
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