Norv Turner Sucks, Alright, But Do I? Analyze this column on the coach.

'93. I mentioned that the president was Clinton.

 

So? Never assume your readers will know. How hard is it to add the year?

 

FAC, are you talking about the 1993 attack or the 9/11 attack?
[/quote]'93. I mentioned that the president was Clinton.
[/quote]Again, it wasn't clearly written. Most people do not remember the 1993 attack. If you wrote something like "The last time Schottenheimer recorded a playoff victory was in 1993, X months prior to the first World Trade Center bombing" it would be clearer to the reader.

 

I don't know, guys...Readers don't know Clinton was president in 1993?

Can't we give them some credit?

 

Not in my experience. Our old ME once asked, "What's a double-double?"

Hell, just watch Jaywalking or that new fourth-grader show on Fox (if you can prevent your head from exploding). There are stupid people out there, and some of them surf the 'Net for sports.

 

'93. I mentioned that the president was Clinton.
[/quote]Again, it wasn't clearly written. Most people do not remember the 1993 attack. If you wrote something like "The last time Schottenheimer recorded a playoff victory was in 1993, X months prior to the first World Trade Center bombing" it would be clearer to the reader.
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I understood the Clinton reference but it might not hurt to say the president was clinton and the year was 93. What I didn't quite get was comparing Schottie's firing to Jimmie Johnson ... as you say Johnson won two Super Bowls and Schottie hasn't won shit ... neither may have got along with their owners but it's not the same.

 

Again, it wasn't clearly written. Most people do not remember the 1993 attack. If you wrote something like "The last time Schottenheimer recorded a playoff victory was in 1993, X months prior to the first World Trade Center bombing" it would be clearer to the reader.
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I understood the Clinton reference but it might not hurt to say the president was clinton and the year was 93. What I didn't quite get was comparing Schottie's firing to Jimmie Johnson ... as you say Johnson won two Super Bowls and Schottie hasn't won shit ... neither may have got along with their owners but it's not the same.
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Originally, I had a more analytical peice that mentioned how Johnson was fired in '93, the same year as the refference to Clinton, then I went into more depth on the comparrison, but I guess I should have taken it out completly when I changed the focus to bashing Turner.

 

The comparison to Jerry-Jimmy is faulty. Johnson quit as much as he was fired. One of the reasons for the tension was that Jimmy was openly flaunting his desire to leave -- I seem to recall a lot of speculation about Jacksonville, whch had just been awarded a franchise, during the week leading up to Jimmy's last Super Bowl win.

 

Agreed. We dumb down things too much as it is.

 

i'd stop reading here

try to make your subjects and verbs agree

team = singular subject
they = plural pronoun

plus, a team can't say anything